A Diary(3)

「要求」

　　根據以下提示寫篇日記，字數：100—160.

　　7月23日，晴。

　　放學廻家路上，我見一位老大爺背著沉甸甸的袋子站在路旁，樣子十分焦急。我走上去問是怎麽廻事，原來老大爺剛從鄕下來，進城看在工廠工作的兒子。由於是初次來，不認識去工廠的路。於是，我就幫他背袋，帶他去工廠找兒子。好不容易才找到他兒子的家，老大爺和兒子十分感激。我廻家時天已很晚，又累又餓，但心裡卻甜滋滋的。因爲我又爲別人做了一件好事。

　　「範文」

　　July 23th， Sunny

　　ass="superseo">After school， on my way home I caught sight of an old grandpa standing by the roadside with a heavy bag on his back. He looked rather anxious. I went up to find out what the matter was. He told me that he had just come from the countryside to see his son who worked in a factory. He had never been here before， and didn't know the way to the factory. So I took over his bag and took him to the factory. We had some difficulty in finding his son's apartment. Both the grandpa and his son were very thankful.

　　It was very late when I got home. I was very tired and hungry. But I was very happy that I had done a good deed for others.

　　「評語」

　　日記記敘了一件自己助人爲樂的好事。首先交待的時間、地點、人物、事件經過，記敘完整，使人覺得真實可信。本文連詞運用十分到位，值得借鋻。