A Diary(4)

「要求」

　　請按下列提示和要求寫一篇日記。

　　內容提示：

　　1.10月17日，星期天，晴。

　　2.你乘公共汽車去學校。

　　3.在車上看見一位老人給一位抱孩子的婦女讓座。

　　4.你羞愧於沒有讓座給那位婦女，竝提前下了車。

　　語句連貫，書寫工整。

　　字數在100—120之間。

　　「範文」

　　July 21th Wednesday Sunny

　　After breakfast， I went to school by bus. There were a lot of people on the bus.

　　About five minutes later， the bus stopped at the next stop. A woman got on carrying a baby in her arms. All the seats were taken. Just then an old woman sitting in front of me stood up and gave her seat to the woman. The woman thanked her. I should have offered my seat to the woman. I felt ashamed of myself. Then I also stood up. When the bus stopped， I got off the bus before my stop.

　　I'll never forget that.

　　「評語」

　　本文在寫作時，採用的是短句，但文章卻很有條理。描寫自己的感受時，採用了虛擬語氣，爲文章增色不少。