A Dog
Adogisa common animal. You can find it almost everywhere. But a dog is a special animal too, because it has given to man help that other animals haven't. It often lives with people at home as a pet (寵物) or as a guard. As a result, most people like dogs.
In my childhood, my father had a white dog. It was a bright (1) dog. One day, when I went to school, followed by my dog, I forgot to take my pencil-box. It would be too late for me to go home for it. When the dog saw my worry [the signs of worry on my face] (2), it went home. After a while, with the pencil-box in its mouth, the dog came to our school. It was really my friend, but it was a short time for the dog to stay with me [before we had to part] (3)。 However, I'll never forget it.
In a police station, a dog is a bright (4) “police-man”。 It can tell different smells. In the country and town, most people feed [ keep ] (5) a dog and let it guard their homes when they areout.
We Chinese people often say, “Don't be a dog that catches mice.” This means, don't do things which are not your business. In fact, dogs can catch mice. It is a good thing, isn't it?So dogs are really our true friends. We should take good care of them while they help us.
陝西省耀縣中學高三(1)班 王小軍
評 語
狗,是人類最爲親近的動物之一。文章用擧例法說明了狗的可愛和作用,文中描寫的一些往事不能不讓我們爲狗的“善解人意”的本領而感歎。文中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下:
(1)、(4)據Longman詞典,bright可以有clever的意思,但一般是指人或人的言行等,如a bright child/idea,我們在選用詞語時,應該注意語境。
(2)原文有些別扭,故改之。
(3)原文語法沒有錯誤,改後強調“分離”,語氣上較好些。
(5)feed衹是指“給……食品”,其實“養狗”可以用keep a dog.
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