My New Shirt

For quite some time after I entered Leping Middle School， I had been longing for a beautiful new shirt， because all my shirts were worn out.

　　There was a nice green shirt in a shop-window on my way to school. Whenever I passed the shop， I would stop to have a look at it. As my family was not rich， the green shirt was too expensive for me to ask my parents to buy. [But how I wished I could have it！] （1）

　　One day， I went as usual to the shop to look at the shirt， but to my surprise the shirt was gone. So I went home， full of tears ， [as if I had lost something precious] （2）。

　　As soon as I got home， Mother called for [called] （3） me in her room. I wiped away my tears at once， and went into the room. To my joy I found the beautiful green shirt lying on the bed. I came over to the shirt， picked it up， and looked at it carefully. [Yes！ It was the one that had been in the shop-window and that I had been longing for so much.] （4） I came to my mother and threw myself into her arms. Tears were running down my cheeks when I said， “Thank you very much， Mother.”

　　That day was the happiest one I had ever had. I don't know how Mother saved up enough money for the shirt， but I have come to realize that although the shirt was costly， nothing is dearer than the love of my parents for me.

　　江西省樂平中學高三（4）班 葉鼕生

　　評 語

　　從對“襯衣”的“渴望”，到發現“襯衣不見了”時的“失落”，最後得到“襯衣”時的喜悅，以及由此領悟到“父母之愛的深切”。全文一氣呵成，感情真摯。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）、（2）、（4）爲全文更加連貫和呼應，特作這些添加。

　　（3）叫喊某人用call sb.，不必加for，call for意爲“邀約”。