範文:I Am a butterfly

「範文」

　　IAm a butterfly

　　Iam an insect. Although I am not as diligent as the bee， I'm much prettier. I have a pair of big wings with bright colors arranged in pretty patterns.

　　The story of my birth is quite strange. My mother laid eggs on the leaf of a plant. After some weeks， these eggs hatched out into little worms with legs. A few weeks later each worm made a covering for itself called cocoon and then went to sleep during all the winter. When the warm weather came back， the worm broke through the cocoon and came out into the world as a lovely butterfly. I was one of them.

　　「評語」

　　本文建立在豐富詳實的科學知識與紥實的語言功底的基礎上。敘事簡潔清晰，說明性強。語言生動細致，句式多變化而又恰儅地配郃文躰，用詞也很到位。