A White Lie

This is a true story which happened when I was eight years old.

　　One day in the afternoon， my mother and I went to take a bath. After we finished bathing， it was almost 6 o'clock in the evening. Of course I felt very hungry. My mother must be hungry too， I thought.

　　Luckily， she brought a small cake in her bag. But how could such a small one [cake] （1） satisfy two hungry persons？ My mother loves me very much. She gave me the whole cake， but nothing to herself. If I ate all the cake， what could my mother have？ I also know [knew] （2） that my mother would not accept it if I only said：“Mum， you are hungry， too. The cake for you.”

　　“Why not try another way？”I thought for a while. Then I pretended that I did not like the cake at all.“Mum， the cake tastes terrible，”I said.“Really？”Mother was very surprised. “It smells good. Well， I'll have it.”

　　“The cake's delicious，”she said to herself while she was having it. I really could not help laughing. Mother was more surprised.“What is the matter， dear？”“I've just told you a white lie.”“A white lie？ Oh， I understand now. You've just played a trick on me！”

　　We both laughed happily.

　　Sometimes a white lie is very helpful， isn't it？

　　江囌省無錫市大橋民辦實騐中學初二（4）班 陳熠玲

　　評 語

　　文章簡潔明快，採用了大量的直接引語以及直接引語式的思考內容，使文章讀來更爲生動。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）這裡指代cake的代詞one用得不夠有力，不如重複一下cake.

　　（2）根據上下文，這裡用過去時爲好。