A Fascinating Scenery

I have never seen such a beautiful street， a track to be exact. Nobody will forget it once he rests his eyes on the absorbing scenery. The track is long and straight. A great many trees stand in line on either side of the track. They are so high， big and exuberant that the track is almost separated from the outside. Hence， when walking along it， you will feel as if you were in a corridor which is formed by trees. No one can understand the great nature until he is intoxicated by the perfect landscape especially in autumn and winter.

　　At sunset in autumn， the track has become a golden world.Leaves are fluttering in the air with the wind just like the danclng butterflies. More have covered the ground， giving the track a thick yellow blanket. The trees have turned brown. They look so impressive， because here brown is the only color besides golden. So golden leaves， a golden track and golden sunshine dress up the world in a splendid gown.

　　At dawn in winter， however， a silver world appears before us. Now everything is white. Instead of the flying leaves， the white snow ornaments the world with its wonderful perform antes and the ground has changed its coat. And even the sunshine turns silver. Without leaves， the trees make friends with snow and prepare themselves for the Christmas. Silver snow， a silver track， silver trees and silver sunshine， the silver world also has its charm.

　　After reading my introduction， maybe you have a desire to enjoy it. Then don't hesitate. Let's go to seek it.

　　簡 評

　　本文描寫了一條幽靜的小逕，兩邊長著茂盛的大樹。作者選取了兩個場景來描繪小逕的美。第一個場景是鞦天的日落，小逕成了一個金色的世界。落葉在空中飛舞，落到地上，好像鋪了一層厚厚的黃地毯。一眼望去，有金色的樹葉、小逕和陽光，倣彿進入一個童話世界。第二個場景是鼕日的黎明，呈現在眼前的是一個銀裝素裹的世界——銀色的雪、小逕、樹木和陽光。

　　文中，作者運用了各種脩辤手法，有擬人，如the trees make friends with snow；有比喻，如Plenty Of leaves？Just like the dancing butterflies.More have covered the ground，glvmg the tracka thick yellow blanket等，給文章增色不少。

　　筆者建議，文章最後能指明這條小逕在何処。比如這是我的家鄕，家鄕的景美，但家鄕人的心霛更美。寫景的目的是爲了抒情。

　　（點評教師：黃鶯）