My Opinion of the Cooperation Between USA and Chin
Cooperation, of course, must go on between two partners.The cooperation between USA and China is a case in point. China is a large country with a long history which is about 5, 000 years old [of 5 000 years] (1) . Many traditional industries such as china (瓷器) , tea, silk and clothing are famous in the world. China has the largest population in the world, nearly 1.3 billion people. Cheap labor is provided in huge processing factories. The Chinese Government opened its door to world trade in 1978. Especially, in recent years, the economy has become better. It is increasing at a rate above 8%. The main policy of [the] (2 ) Chinese Government is to develop the socialist market-economy. China welcomes all foreign companies and products. China produces [has] (3 ) many different kinds of natural resources. It's rich in natural gas, oil and coal. Agricultural technology is developing very fast and production is increasing quickly. The standard of living has changed [The living standards of people have risen] (4) a lot.
The superpower, USA, is economically strong. In USA, the level of mechanization (機械化 ) is very high. High-grade technology is widely used in industry, agriculture and national defense. America is also a large country of agriculture. Half of the corn in the world is grown there. Industry there develops very fast. Many famous companies such as, BOEING, IBM, FORD, CHRYSLER AND GM are American. Many other corporations from USA are also famous around the world, for example, Adidas, KFC, McDonalds, and Nike are everywhere.
If the largest developing country and the world's superpower cooperate together, imagine what can happen: great changes for both countries. The people in these two countries will become closer friends. The economics will grow very fast. Pacific-rim(環太平洋) countries and North America will become much developed. The development of the economics in these areas will stimulate (刺激) economic growth in other parts of the world. When this happens, the whole world will join together closely and international business will go on more prosperously (繁榮) .
In 1997, China's President Jiang Zemin visited USA. In 1998 President Bill Clinton visited China. These great visits mean that the chances of cooperation between these two great nations will increase. I hope the companies and people will cooperate with [in] (5 ) economy, culture, science and technology and other areas more often. People in these two countries will live better and better. All of this is the hope of a common Chinese student .
新疆烏魯木齊市第一中學高2000屆八班 羅明翔
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文章先分析了中美兩國各自的長処,然後指出兩國優勢互補後的美好前景,最後提到中美首腦的互訪,表示了實現這一美好前景的可能性。全文思路清晰,結搆嚴謹,是一篇較有說服力的議論文。文中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下:
(1)原文太囉唆,改後簡潔。 5000年本身已是個大約數,可省去about.
(2)這裡要加上定冠詞。
(3)produce與後麪resources搭配不妥,故改之。
(4)原文僅說change,不夠達意。
(5)原文介詞不妥。 A cooperate with B,A and B cooperate in某領域。
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