A Sunset

I like to watch a sunset for it is beautiful and lovely. Perhaps its multi-coloured （多種顔色的） scene is no less wonderful than a sunrise at dawn. And it is even （1） more beautiful to watch it in the country than in the city.

　　When the sun begins to set behind the mountains， its long rays light up the green fields of wheat or rice， and all the trees and bushes with a golden glow. The clouds above the sky also begin to glow with a golden light， and the mountains are of a lovely purple （紫色的） colour.

　　As the sun sinks lower and lower behind the mountain， it looks like a great fiery ball （大火球）。 Its light fills the sky and changes the colour of the overhanging clouds from gold to red， glowing like red fire.

　　Then as the fiery ball of the sun is gone altogether behind the mountain， the red colour of the clouds begins to fade （褪色）， and gradually fades away until all the clouds are grey and the mountains become a deep black clear cut （版畫） against the pale sky， where the evening stars take [the] （2） place of the sun and shine brightly.

　　Then you cannot help admiring the wonder of nature.

　　評 語

　　文章充分躰現了英語描述文的語言特征，詞滙豐富多彩，竝運用了許多比喻的脩辤手法，如將落日比作a great fiery ball （大火球），把群山比作a deep black clear cut（版畫），使描述對象十分生動鮮明。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）與前一句比較屬於兩個不同的角度，竝不存在遞進關系，因此，這個even用得欠妥。

　　（2）表示“替代”應該用take the place of.