An Unexpected Present

Today I received a letter. The unfamiliar， naive （天真的）and immature （不成熟的） handwriting on the envelope showed that the letter was written by a child. Full of curiosity， I tore open the letter， only to find [and was surprised to find] （1） that it was written by my little nephew——Jianjian. I like Jianjian very much. He has not yet entered primary school. But he was able to write such a good Chinese letter. It was not easy for him to do so. In the letter， there is [was] （2） a picture which was drawn by himself. It was a zoo with a lot of animals in it. On the end [At the bottom] （3） of the paper， there were six Chinese words， meaning“Happy New Year to You.”The words and picture were so well done that it was hard to believe that they were made by a child of no more than five years old. Actually when he was only two or three years old， he showed great interest in drawing pictures. Some time later， encouraged by his parents， he began to draw pictures by himself.

　　How time flies！ It is already two years since I saw Jianjian last time. I miss him very much. I'm really surprised at the progress he has made. He enjoys drawing and his parents have sent him to an art school， in which， he learns [has learned]（4） some basic rules of drawing. Now he is able to talk about painting.

　　The picture is the best of all the presents I have received. I like it very much.

　　浙江省台州市椒江一中高二（8）班 李奚清

　　評 語

　　文章從一封信和一張畫著手，較爲形象生動地描述了一個愛畫畫竝初有成傚的小男孩，讀來自然流暢。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）only to do在句子後半部分，一般表示“未曾料到的往往是不如意的結果”，如：He hurried to the station only to see the train had left. 這裡似改爲was surprised to find爲好。

　　（2）原文時態有誤。

　　（3）表示在一張紙的下部，應該用at the bottom of the paper.

　　（4）根據上下文，這裡用現在完成時爲好。