A Lesson I Learnt

Once in the primary school there was a broken chair in our classroom. The board（木板）on it had been lost， and therefore， nobody was able to sit on it.

　　One day， I said to a friend of mine，“You see， the chair is broken， and it must be great fun if you turn it over and put it on the shoulder， [and] （1） then walk in the classroom by shouting [shouting for attention]”（2）。

　　“Oh， that's a good idea！”He was excited， and immediately did what I told him to do.

　　“Look at me. It's so interesting！”He shouted with the chair on his shoulder and walked up and down the classroom.

　　To our surprise， the teacher came in and saw him.“What are you doing， silly boy？”The teacher shouted at him angrily. “Just stand here with your chair！”

　　“But it was…”he wanted to say that it was I who told [had told] （3） him to do so， but the teacher interrupted him. “Don't say anything else. Stand here quietly until I tell you to put it down！”

　　He wasn't allowed to say anything with the chair on his shoulder. For a long time， he looked sad， tearful and even angry.

　　I felt sorry for him， but it was too late. The punishment made him so sad that he wouldn't talk to me any more. I lost his friendship.

　　This experience has told me that nobody should take advantage of others' innocence（天真，單純，無知）。 You will lose many friends if you do so.

　　上海市大同中學高三（5）班 王煒

　　評 語

　　童年時代的生活充滿童趣，令人難忘。其中有不少小事卻能令人深思，給人以啓示。王煒同學抓住這樣一件小事，引申出了一段道理。文章語言簡潔，利用對話使記敘生動明快。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）一連串竝列的動作，最後一個動作前還是加上連接詞and爲好。

　　（2）介詞by用得令人費解。不如去掉，現在分詞shouting表示伴隨情況，根據下文，加上for attention.

　　（3）根據上下文，這裡用過去完成時爲好。