Law Adjustment for Childrens Maturity A Necessity

As is pointed out by some socialists， children nowadays show a growing tendency to become mature at an earlier age compared with children who were born twenty years ago. The younger generation has a strong self-conscious. And they are eager to make their own decisions. Hence， an adjustment of current laws is suggested by some experts to fit in the newly developed situation.

　　That sounds like a good idea. But does it reveal the truth？Frankly speaking， the side effects of adjustments in laws， as far as I am concerned， are much greater than their possible merits.First of all， the assumption that"children are more mature than before" is yet to ascertain. Up to now， none of the revolution proponents can give a satisfying definition to tell what maturity exactly means， let alone measuring maturity quantitatively.Thus it is less likely for them to deduce their conclusion. At the same time， with the spreading of so-called maturity， more children are involved in crimes， including some violent ones like murders and hijacks. The conspicuous increase in adolescent crimes calls for an enforcement of law， not irresponsible liberation. Second， suppose the hypothesis held by the revolution proponents is not only objective but also convincing， ignoring the paradox mentioned above， it is still inadequate to conduct a law amendment since"most children are mature" implies the fact that there are still a portion of children， who no matter older or younger are mature. As is known to all， laws are concerned with all the objects of the society. The pre mature ones' rights should also be protected equally. Hence， a common demand for custodians of children aged under eighteen is necessary， if not imperative. Last but not least， a"mature" child who intends on independence lacks a necessary income as the financial support.Due to this situation， if an adjustment of law were carried out，there would be a peculiar phenomenon that children are decision independent while financially reliant.

　　Due to the three reasons listed above， it is unwise to conduct a complete law adjustment at the moment. Children of the twenty first century are still in need of love and care， as children were twenty years ago.

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　　李瑩同學的這篇作文分爲三段，第一段作爲introduction，在第二段分三個方麪進行論述，最後一段進行縂結。結搆清晰，觀點鮮明，是這篇作文的一大優勢。

　　作者的語言功底紥實，尤其善於使用詞組和習語，如last but not least，if not等的使用準確而恰儅。作者還善於使用各種語篇的啣接手段，啣接詞的使用使邏輯清晰，顯得思維縝密，這是本文的又一大優勢。

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