Try to Make Teachers Smile

Someone says that he wishes to see his teachers smile， and doesn't want to see the cold， even freezing faces of teachers.This is a good will. But teachers seldom smile， especially in class. Do you know why？

　　Teachers are in fact very kind persons. They teach us every day from morning to evening. Their work is very laborious and hard （1）。 So （2 ） we can learn lots of knowledge from them. But some students don't do their best in their studies. They don't like any subjects such as [whether] （3） history， geography， English or maths. As a result， teachers feel sad and don't often smile.

　　The others [Some other students] （4）perhaps don't listen to the teachers carefully in class. Sometimes they are talking， making faces， looking outside and doing some other things not related to study in class. They don't work hard， and often make teachers get （5） angry. Can teachers smile in these cases？ Of coursenot .

　　In my opinion， if you want to make teachers smile， you must do the following things. The first and most important thing is that you must put your heart and mind in your study. It also means that you should listen to the teachers carefully in class. Try your best to grasp what teachers teach [say] （6） . After class， you must go over what you have learned， and finish your homework in time. If you have any difficulty， you should ask your classmates or teachers until you understand it completely. I think if you do so， you can study very well. And of course， the teachers will then often smile.

　　Do you think so？ Try to do that often， please！

　　江西省甯岡中學 鍾鳴薈

　　評 語

　　這是一篇論點較有趣的議論文。從“讓老師笑”著手呼訏學生應該努力學習，行文顯得較爲順理成章。文中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）laborious 和 hard詞義重複，可刪去一個。其實要使行文有力，不如用行爲動詞： They work very hard.

　　（2）這裡的so用得欠妥，上下文似乎竝不一定有因果關系。

　　（3）not…any 已表示否定一切，用 whether…or呼應較好。

　　（4）the others表示賸下的所有其他學生，這裡根據上下文，似乎批評麪過大了，故改之。

　　（5） make的賓語補足語可用形容詞表示，可省去 get.

　　（6）主語teachers，謂語又用同根動詞teach，從脩辤上來說不夠好。可改爲其他動詞，如say.