Departure

「要求」

　　描寫一個場麪，表現離別的情況。要求：出場人物至少三個，有人物的心理，語言及動作描寫。有適儅景物描寫作爲背景。字數不限。

　　「範文」

　　Departure

　　I was ready to leave for Beijing after the winter vacation. Looking out of the window of the train， I saw my parents still standing on the platform.

　　“Write to us as soon as you arrive，”Father said，“Be sure to take good care of yourself.”He is usually quite solemn， but at that time， he looked very gentle and kind.

　　Mother was standing a little behind father. When our eyes met， she smiled a bit. Through her smile， I could see something else.

　　It was cold. Snow covered the edge of the platform. From time to time， the wind lifted my mother's gray hair.

　　“Ma”， I leaned out of the window， trying to say something to comfort her and change the atmosphere a little， but I failed. I just didn't know what to say. Suddenly the bell rang.

　　“Good-bye！”　 I finally cried out.

　　“Good-bye！” Father waved to me. Mother took a few steps forward as if to say something， but she only looked at me.

　　So difficult to keep back the tears.

　　The train whistled， and began to gather speed.

　　Don't hesitate to say “love” to your parents.

　　「評語」

　　這是一篇優秀習作，選材精儅，描寫到位，文字簡潔，很好地起到了抒情達意的作用。也許有親身躰會的關系，讀來真切動人。