An Unforgettable Day

One morning， I went to school very early. When I arrived at our classroom， I saw only a few students reading there. In order not to interrupt them， I came to my desk quietly. Before sitting down， I found a letter lying on my desk. I tore it open and began to read it.

　　“Dear Miss Zhou， … I feel I have fallen in love with you…Could you give[do] （1）me a favour？ I'll wait for you at the gate after school this afternoon.…Kiss you…”

　　My God！ A love letter！ Who wrote it？…At that moment， I was struck dumb with fear. I could almost hear the beating of my heart. If someone knows it， I will…No！ No！ I never expected that such a shameful thing would happen to me. I was too young to accept it. What should I do with it？

　　For the whole morning， I did nothing but think about it. I dared not face the classmates. It seemed as if I was[were]（2）undergoing a severe test. In fact， it[I] （3）was.

　　I was deep in thought when I thought of my class teacher.She often said to us，“I will be a friend of yours. If you have any trouble， I'll do my best to help you.”Yes， she was then the only person who could understand me.

　　At noon， I gave the letter to my teacher and asked her for advice. To my delight， she promised not only to help me at the class meeting of that day， but also to keep the secret for me.

　　To me the remaining time went by in a whirl of uneasiness （不安）。

　　It was time for the class meeting. The feelings of nervousness and excitement came back again. Fortunately， the first subject of the meeting was what I had been longing for. My teacher asked our monitor to read an article which said that the middle school students were forbidden to be in love. On hearing this， many of my classmates could not help laughing， but our“brave”monitor went on. Finally my teacher gave us some advice. However， I hadn't been calmed down completely.

　　School was over. I was going home with doubt when our monitor appeared and said to me.

　　“I'm very sorry. It's me who have written（4）the letter.”

　　Why？ I simply couldn't believe my ears. It was he， our monitor， who had read the article[at the class meeting] （5）。Oh， yes， wasn't it my teacher's clever arrangement？ She must have recognized his handwriting.

　　I was sorry that my monitor had received such a special “punishment”。 But in the meantime， I thought that it was necessary for him to get it， because he had broken the rules.

　　I smiled a sweet smile on my way home. I had passed an unforgettable day happily in my life.

　　湖南省湘鄕市第三中學43班 周今朝

　　評 語

　　作爲一個中學生，儅有人對你說：“我愛你”時，應該怎麽辦？作者從這個廣大同齡人感興趣的問題入手，一下子抓住了讀者，然後通過作者的內心思考突出如何正確解決這一問題的懸唸。最後描述老師“聰明的辦法”，使問題得到圓滿解決。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）一般用do sb. a favour這樣的搭配。

　　（2）這裡根據上下文應該用虛擬式。

　　（3）原句應該是“In fact， I was undergoing a severe test”的簡略式，因此，主語不能用it，而要用I.

　　（4）儅強調結搆所強調的內容爲句子主語時，主格代詞也可以換作賓格代詞。但據A University Grammar of English 稱，改用賓格代詞後，後麪的謂語動詞要用第三人稱形式。如：

　　It is I who am to blame.

　　It is me who is to blame.

　　因此，原句中have似乎用得欠妥。

　　（5）這裡加上at the class meeting使語義更清楚。