A Trip to Beijing

After the final examinations， my mother took me to Beijing on Jan. 20. We went there by train. We got off at Beijing Railway Station and lived [stayed] （1） in my uncle's. In those days we went to the Ruins of Yuan Ming Yuan， the Temple of Heaven， the Zoo of Beijing， the Summer Palace， the Forbidden City （故宮） and the Memorial Hall of Chairman Mao.

　　Beijing is not only a city with a long history but also a very modernized one. She's our political and cultural centre. She has many places of historic interest and scenic beauty. We can see high buildings everywhere. Every year lots of Chinese and foreign friends come to visit [it] （2） .

　　When Mom and I reached Beijing， the first thing we saw was a clear sky. The sky in Beijing was really very blue. The air in Beijing was so fresh that it made me excited.

　　Now in Beijing， the traffic is very convenient. There're a lot of buses， taxis， little buses [minbuses]（3） ， trolleybuses and subways [there is a subway too] （4） . Every ten minutes there must be a bus coming to the stop where you are standing.

　　Beijing is very clean. When I saw a rubbish-bag in my uncle's house， I didn't know what it was for at first. So my uncle told me that each family in Beijing has such bags. They have been used since last year. People put rubbish in them and take them downstairs to a certain place when they are full. Then the street cleaners take them away.

　　Now， Beijing people are busy working at various constructional projects. I think when the projects are finished， Beijing will be more beautiful！

　　上海第三中學初二（4）班 張瑩穎

　　評 語

　　作者是一個初二學生，運用學到的英語，將自己的北京之行寫得富有感情。有觀察，有議論。用詞和句型也較爲貼切。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）在uncle家中是短暫停畱，用stay較好。

　　（2）這裡 visit 作及物動詞，加上賓語it爲好。

　　（3）麪包車爲 minibus.

　　（4）subway 作爲一種交通形式，與bus等具躰交通工具竝列欠妥，故另起一句。