Taking Photos

I spent a very instructive weekend， I should say. Zhang Weijiang and I went to Jinan Park to practise taking photos. We are both the members of the photography group. To take some photos is not a difficult job， but if you want to take some good or artistic photos， it is much more difficult. You must study. Of course， you can't only study the knowledge in the book， but you ought to study the skill in practice. You must pay attention to the distance， diaphragm （光圈） and velocity [exposure （曝光時間）] （1） when you are taking photos. How to find a good view to form a good picture may be the most important. I am just a learner. In the past， I did not like to take photos very much， but as soon as I took the camera， I was attracted by it. My father likes taking photos too. He is not a professional cameraman， but he is good at taking photos. I became his model when I was only 56 days old！ Now， there are two photography fans in my family.

　　In the park， so many people asked me to take photos for them. One of them was a gardener. He was in his dirty clothes with mud on his face， but he looked quite honest and kind. I took a photo of him when he was working. The others were lovely children playing happily. Their parents thanked me for taking pictures of them. I felt slightly [a little] （2） proud.

　　I like taking photos. It can keep the wonderful views or exciting moments for ever. When I am old， I will look at these photos again. They will remind me of the things that have passed. I wish [hope] （3）everyone will enjoy taking photos.

　　上海市第三女子中學高二（1）班 陸訢玥

　　評 語

　　文章寫得簡潔活潑，很有生活氣息。特別是能有感而發地進行議論，使文章更爲動人。文章中某些語言上的不足之処點評脩改如下：

　　（1）velocity是指 rate of movement.曝光時間或曝光速度可用exposure.

　　（2）根據上下文，有肯定的語氣，用a little較好。

　　（3）從句用一般將來時will enjoy，主句不能用wish.wish後接從句，要用虛擬語氣。根據上下文，改爲hope較好。